Revision Plan

I plan to create a more specific title as well as fix some minor phrasing issues. Also, I plan to clarify some of the ideas and arguments I have presented. These corrections will help with the flow of my editorial and better the communication between the reader and I. Rather than site the information I've researched and implemented, I am going to connect more information to the quotes and statistics I have given so that my sources can be readily checked. Along with providing this information, I need to better correlate the quotes I've used to facilitate better flow in my paper. Lastly, there is an area in my last argument where I need to fix my transition from one perspective to another.